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The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The provided data illustrates the average amount of
sodium
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, saturated fats, and added sugars present in different meals, which causes them to be unhealthy. As a general trend, dinner contains the biggest amount of preservatives,
while
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 the exact opposite is true for breakfast. Added sugars appear to be used the most in snacks, but the percentage is divided equally between the other components. Both,
sodium
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 and saturated fat, are found the most in meals served towards the end of the day, with 43 and 37%. If there was a higher percentage of
sodium
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 in breakfast foods, the total of chemicals in breakfast would remain constant between every
perservative
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preservative
.
Sodium
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 and saturated fat are distributed
similarly
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 throughout the meals; meanwhile, for added
sugar
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sugar,
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 the leading component is snacks with nearly 50%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrient breakdown
  • average percentage
  • excessive consumption
  • health risks
  • sodium
  • saturated fats
  • added sugars
  • hypertension
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • contribution
  • comparison
  • meal types
  • dietary balance
  • nutritional value
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