The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. 

Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table gives a
comparsion
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comparison
of the
population
of New Zealand from the
years
2011 and 2012 showing 4 different age groups which are under 15, 15-39, 40-64 and people over 65
years
. The proportion of
change
in
population
during these two
years
is
also
provided
as well as
the total
population
during each year.
Overall
, we see that there has been a rise
of
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total
population
when comparing 2011 to 2012, leaving the percentage of
change
to be 0.6. The age group which has the highest percentage of
change
is the 65 over category
whereas
its
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not the same case for
under
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the under
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15 and 15-39
group
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groups
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. From a higher
population
in 2011, there has been a slight fall in numbers in 2012, leaving
a
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apply
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0.2
percent
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per cent
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of
population
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the population
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in both categories. The age group 40-64 has
also
shown
significant
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a significant
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rise in numbers when comparing the two
years
but the
population
aged 65 and above skyrocketed. From a
population
of only 573,946 people aged above 65 in 2011 to around 596,903 people. The
percent
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of
change
also
increased massively, resting at approximately 4.0
percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years, change with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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