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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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These days many well-qualified white-collar workers from medical, engineering and information techies from low-settled
nations
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 are moving to well-settled
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 for high-salaried positions in big multi-national companies. If
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 practice continues these low-settled
countries
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 will lack good talented
professionals
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 who can help
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nation
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 to grow.
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 these poor
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 invested
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 wealth
on
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professional
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 by providing well
equiped
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equipped
 colleges will be lacking good and efficient workers to build
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their
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example,
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 poor
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 will lack good engineers and techies who can build good infrastructure projects.
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 these
countries
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 hire
professional
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professionals
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 from other
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by
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which these
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 pay more
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then
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 required. the potential solution
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these issue
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 is that
countries
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 should bring up schemes and support young
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. That can
finantially
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financially
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start ups
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.
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, these poor
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 are suffering from many different diseases caused by lack of
nutritions
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 and good drinking water by which many individuals are
dieing
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dying
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insufficent
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insufficient
 doctors and medical
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 are in search of good doctors who can treat these individuals and good scientists who can find
solution
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 to
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 problems. The possible solution for
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 issue is
government
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 should bring up
well equipped
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 medical colleges and research centres
which
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with
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 good teaching staff.
therfore
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this
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counties
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countries
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 will
produse
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produce
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 every year. In conclusion, low settled
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nation
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 need professional
assosiates
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associates
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nation
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better
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for living
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government
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 should provide
required
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 facilities for
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professionals
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for
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 serve their
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Your essay addresses the task but could benefit from more clarity and depth regarding possible solutions. Try to elaborate more on the solutions you suggest, providing detailed and specific examples when possible.
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