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The table below highlights data on the number of travelers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012

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Given is a set of tabulated data indicating comprehensive information regarding the number of
passengers
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 of 3 various airports in Germany in a 6-year period, commencing in 2007 and culminating in 2012. From an
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 perspective, it is starkly apparent that with the exception of 2009, Frankfurt was the most popular one, and 2012 saw the most
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 in opposition of 2007 when the total number was lower.
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 rigorous scrutiny reveals that Dusseldorf represented 27.2
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, increasing substantially and reaching an all-time high in 2009 with 48.2
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 following which
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 amount showed a downward trend and reached almost 33
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passengers
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 in 2011,
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, it rose again by nearly 12.5
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 people in 2012. As regards Frankfort, it can be deduced that it faced an exponential rise throughout the period.
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 the number of
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 accounted for 36.5 in 2009, it peaked in 2012 with almost 69
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. regarding Berlin Tegel, it can be seen that it went in parallel with Frankfurt. It hit
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rock bottom in 2009 with 17.3
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,
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 reached a peak in 2012 with 43.3
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introduction conclusion
Ensure to provide a clear introduction and conclusion to give your essay a logical flow. Summarize the main points in the conclusion.
supported main points
Clarify the main points and support them with specific data from the table. For example, mentioning the exact figures clearly helps to strengthen your argument.
logical structure
Avoid overly complex sentences that may confuse the reader. Try to break down longer sentences and make them easier to understand.
task achievement
You have successfully identified and described the key trends in the data over the given period of six years.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay demonstrates a good attempt to summarize the comparison between the three airports in terms of passenger numbers.

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