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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.To what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays,
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choice
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 to send their
children
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schools
 and
non co-educational
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schools
.
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 some individuals believe that
children
 going to
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sex
schools
 have many drawbacks when
child
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the child
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 becomes adult. I firmly agree, that
kids
 going to non co-educational
schools
 have more cons than going to co-educational.
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the drawbacks
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same
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sex
schools
. On the one side, Juveniles going to
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 institutions are familiar with playing and competing with
opposite
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sex
 students. These
kids
 develop to understand
basic
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 nature of
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children
.
for instance
, educational institutions, educate
children
 on
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 aspects towards other
children
.
furthermore
.
this
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kids
 have
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a competitive
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 environment where they learn to work together and against
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kids
.
when
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the
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 grow up to be adults,
this
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kids
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 easily co-ordinate and
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 with
oposite
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opposite
 genders in their
work place
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. On the other side, guardians with stereotypical thinking believe that
children
 get spoiled and attracted to
children
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oposite
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opposite
sex
.
due to
 which they assume that
children
 will lack focus and interest towards education.
however
, individuals studying in
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sex
schools
 will face behavioural and co-ordination Issues with opposite gender
kids
 when they grow as adults. because
,
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 these
children
 are not educated in their
schools
.
for instance
, I witnessed a female co-worker in my organisation who
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 to work with
male
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 co-worker.
this
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a sisters
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sisters
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 school and
have
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 never had
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exposure
 working with boys and male peers. In conclusion, Parents should send their
kids
 to co-educational
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 institutions because they shall have no drawbacks when they are adults.
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task achievement
Ensure that all ideas are fully explained and supported. Incorporate more relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, include research studies or statistics on the impact of single-sex and co-educational schooling.
coherence and cohesion
Work on making the essay more logically structured. Improve the organization by making sure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus. Avoid abrupt transitions and ensure ideas flow smoothly from one to another.
general
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. Consider using a variety of sentence types and more sophisticated vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of the essay.
introduction and conclusion
Revise the introduction for clarity and conciseness. Clearly state your position in the introduction and provide an outline of the key points you will discuss. This sets a strong tone for the rest of the essay.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear position on the topic, which is supported throughout.
introduction and conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a framework for the essay.
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The main points are relevant and address the essay question.
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Good attempts are made to provide examples, which are crucial in supporting the arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • social interaction
  • real-world preparation
  • gender stereotypes
  • academic performance
  • healthy competition
  • personal and professional settings
  • reinforce
  • collaborate
  • representative environment
  • promote gender equality
  • break down stereotypes
  • social pressures
  • academic concentration
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