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The graph shows the percentage of 15 year olds with low literacy (reading and writing) levels in four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of 15 year olds with low literacy (reading and writing) levels in four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the hospital entry for five hospitals in European continent countries,
such
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 as Forthsmith, Adlin, Stanton, Bardley, and Oxley in a 14-year period. Each point represents a
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 interval for that particular year, and there are several key features which are set out below.
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there were three hospitals that experienced an upward
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. Adlin had the highest person interval between the 14-year period, as he started with 110
patients
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 and had it doubled by 2018, which made him the second highest
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patients
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 compared to Bardley, which had
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a lower
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patient
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 interval than Adlin’s, but
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a higher
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 count, as it started with 200
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 and ended with 250
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 by 2018. The third hospital with an upward
trend
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 is Stanton, which started with only 75
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 and built it up to 140 by 2018. Comparing these three made Stanton the lowest in
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 of
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 interval and
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 count.
In contrast
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, Fortsmith experienced a rather stable
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.
This
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 can be seen as it started with 165
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 in 2004 and
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 with only 170
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 in 2008. Despite the stable
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 interval, Fortsmith still had it high with 30
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 ahead of Stanton’s, which had an upward
trend
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. In conclusion, throughout the
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14-year
 period, Bradley had the most
patients
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 compared to the other four countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words patient, trend, patients with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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