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A friend you made while you were studying abroad would like to spend a semester studying in your country. He/she has written to ask for your advice. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • describe why you think he/she will enjoy it • explain why you recommend studying at your university • give some advice about how to apply Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ____________,

#friend #semester #country #advice #university #addresses #____________
Dear Gagan, Hope you are doing splendidly! I received your letter and
glad
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 to know you want to study in India. Why
not
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don't
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 you
take
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be
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admission
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admitted
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in
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to
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 my campus? If you get a chance to study
in
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at
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 my college which is LPU
college
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College
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 of
science
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Science
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, you will be over the moon.
Firstly
, there is a big lab where you can learn more.
Secondly
, one of the
professor
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professors
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 of
this
 science lab is very famous and
got
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 many rewards in his life.
Hence
, you will get
education
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an education
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 from
best
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the best
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 teachers.
Thirdly
, I will be there too, which means you do not need to bother making new friends.
In addition
 to
this
,
this
insitute
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institute
 has
speciality
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a speciality
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, they focus on practical subjects more
instead
 of
therortical
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theoretical
 which I know, you will like. How you can apply? First of all, you have to scroll to
college
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the college
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 website and submit
a
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an
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 application form followed by
fees
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fee
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 payment.
Then
, you will receive an offer letter to join. Hopefully, you will
go
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agree
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 with my suggestion. Excited to meet you soon. Best regards, Waris
Submitted by sunnytalwan065 on

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Advice
There are a few grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing that can make the letter slightly difficult to read. Consider proofreading your work or having someone else review it to catch those mistakes.
Advice
While the letter covers all points of the task, it could be more detailed at certain places. Adding more specific examples of what the university offers and how to apply would enhance the completeness.
Suitable Writing Tone
The letter maintains an appropriate and friendly tone throughout which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
Logical Structure
Good use of a clear and direct approach to convey your points, making it easy to follow.
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