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1. The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

1. The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.
The chart illustrates information about several businesses in the UK and their salaries. The table illustrates the average working
hours
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 per
week
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 for each business.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
salary
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 after
three
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years
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 is higher than when started. Remarkably, the
salary
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 when started and after
three
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years
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 as an underground driver is the highest
while
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 the firefighter has the highest average working
hours
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 weekly. We can see that the underground driver is paid 50000
pounds
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 when started and about 51000
pounds
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 after
three
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years
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 if they
work
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 36
hours
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 a
week
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 on average;
However
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, the firefighter is only paid 40000
pounds
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 when started and about 41000
pounds
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 after
three
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years
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 when they
work
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 55
hours
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 a
week
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 on average. Regarding police position, there is not much difference in
salary
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 when started and after
three
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years
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, each police receives about 20000
pounds
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 for the average working of 40
hours
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 per
week
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.
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, those who
work
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 as nurses have the lowest
salary
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 compared with the remaining professions, about 18000
pounds
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 when started and about 19000
pounds
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 after
three
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years
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 when they
work
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 38
hours
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 every
week
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, salary, three, years, pounds, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • salary levels
  • disparities
  • correlation
  • average working hours
  • job satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • personal time
  • economic impact
  • social impact
  • job demand
  • skill levels
  • broad economy
  • profession
  • community contribution
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