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The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates consumers' average annual
expenditure
 on
cell
 phones, national and international
fixed-line
 and
services
 in America from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the amount of money spent on
cell
 phone
services
 and international
fixed-line
services
 increased
while
 the amount of money spent on national
fixed-line
services
 decreased. Remarkably, the average annual
expenditure
 on
cell
 phone
services
 was the highest compared with the remaining others. We can see that they only paid 200
USD
 for the
cell
 phone
services
 at the start of the period, it was the lowest figure but it peaked at over 700
USD
at the end
 of the period. The average annual
expenditure
 on international
fixed-line
also
 witnessed a very slight growth from 270
USD
 to about 300
USD
 all over the period shown. Regarding the national
fixed-line
services
, in 2001 there was 700
USD
expenditure
 on it, which was the highest at that time;
However
,
this
 figure experienced a significant dropping to 400
USD
 in 2010, and it was second position in 2021.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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