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The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates consumers' average annual
expenditure
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 on
cell
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 phones, national and international
fixed-line
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 and
services
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 in America from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the amount of money spent on
cell
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 phone
services
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 and international
fixed-line
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services
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 increased
while
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 the amount of money spent on national
fixed-line
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services
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 decreased. Remarkably, the average annual
expenditure
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 on
cell
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 phone
services
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 was the highest compared with the remaining others. We can see that they only paid 200
USD
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 for the
cell
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 phone
services
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 at the start of the period, it was the lowest figure but it peaked at over 700
USD
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at the end
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 of the period. The average annual
expenditure
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 on international
fixed-line
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also
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 witnessed a very slight growth from 270
USD
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 to about 300
USD
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 all over the period shown. Regarding the national
fixed-line
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services
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, in 2001 there was 700
USD
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expenditure
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 on it, which was the highest at that time;
However
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,
this
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 figure experienced a significant dropping to 400
USD
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 in 2010, and it was second position in 2021.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, cell, fixed-line, services, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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