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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The map provides the
change
of
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 the village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 during the period 1995
and
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to and
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 present.
Overall
 it is clear that there was development in the present and dermatic
change
to
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for
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 better
.through
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through
increases
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increased
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 population. According
what
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 can be shown recently the village dermatic
change
 . in 1995
provides
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forest park side east
the
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of the
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 road
very
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and very
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 crowed because the less the street . The home hold
foces
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focuses
in
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on
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 one
places
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place
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. The hotel
not
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does not
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 have
the
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parking
the
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for the
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 people but the car
in
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apply
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far
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 way hotel and effect stress on the other hand , in the present
the
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village development the traffic
experess
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express
 the population increased very large majority. Twice provides some services
such
 as restaurants, hotel with parking car , golf and
apertment
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apartment
 so there was rose the road . Surrounded
gradual
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by gradual
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change
 .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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