The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

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The table presents the expenditure breakdown

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3 different categories: food hotel, and and drink, restaurant and by different age groups of UK

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in 2004.

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the table data,

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under 30 spend the most money on restaurants and hotels, just under 15% of their total savings,

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between 61 and 75 spend only 2& of their total budget.

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annual category spends over 20% on entertainment and

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is the highest point in

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category,

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the youngest group is almost not interested in entertainment and spends only 68

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all spending. Another trend which can be traced based on the data based in the bar chart

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is the increasing of popularity food and drinks popularity with increasing age. In fact, the smallest percentage of 58 belongs to the youngest age category of

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under 30,

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the largest percentage equal to 23% belongs to

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over 76

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, I would like to say that different ages prefer not the same categories,

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we can say that preferences change with the process of growing up and the table is a clear proof of

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