The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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The table presents the expenditure breakdown
on
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3 different categories: food hotel, and and drink, restaurant and by different age groups of UK
people
in 2004.
According to
the table data,
people
under 30 spend the most money on restaurants and hotels, just under 15% of their total savings,
while
people
between 61 and 75 spend only 2& of their total budget.
Moreover
,
this
annual category spends over 20% on entertainment and
this
is the highest point in
this
category,
while
the youngest group is almost not interested in entertainment and spends only 68
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all spending. Another trend which can be traced based on the data based in the bar chart
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is the increasing of popularity food and drinks popularity with increasing age. In fact, the smallest percentage of 58 belongs to the youngest age category of
people
under 30,
while
the largest percentage equal to 23% belongs to
people
over 76
To conclude
, I would like to say that different ages prefer not the same categories,
after
this
we can say that preferences change with the process of growing up and the table is a clear proof of
this
thesis.
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