Many people choose to learn practical subjects therefore theoretical subjects will be no longer be taught in universities. Do you agree or disagree?.

I disagree with the idea that theoretical subjects will
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. Both theoretical and practical
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a huge role in our study. Many university
students
today prefer to study because they want to learn by doing something. Theoretical
knowledge
helps us understand the basic principles.
For instance
, in exact sciences like math and physics, understanding the theory is crucial for making some new discoveries. Practical skills are important for real-life situations. They give us the ability to think on our feet.
For example
, medical
students
need to learn about the human body before they can perform surgeries.
Likewise
, engineering
students
must understand material properties before they can design something. Universities want to balance both types of learning.
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think quickly and solve problems. Without theoretical
knowledge
,
students
may not understand their fields' depths. Practical skills alone
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enough to increase
knowledge
. In conclusion,
while
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are important, theoretical
knowledge
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also
necessary. They work together to provide full education. Universities should continue to teach both theoretical and practical subjects to build the foundation of their
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careers and lives.
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Ensure that your essay has a clear thesis statement in the introduction. This will make your stance on the topic more evident to the reader. For example, explicitly state that you disagree with the idea that theoretical subjects will be eliminated from universities.
coherence cohesion
While the essay flows logically, consider better transitions between paragraphs for improved coherence. For instance, phrases like 'On the other hand,' 'Additionally,' or 'Moreover' can be useful for this purpose.
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Although your essay includes relevant examples, it's beneficial to provide more detailed explanations or additional examples to strengthen your arguments. For example, elaborate on how theoretical knowledge can lead to specific innovations or breakthroughs.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in understanding your main argument and summarizes your points well.
task achievement
Both the main body paragraphs focus on distinct points (the importance of theoretical knowledge and the importance of practical skills), which provides a balanced view of the topic.
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The examples provided (medical students needing theoretical knowledge before practical application, and the balance required in engineering) are relevant and illustrate your points effectively.

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