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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The graph below shows the
percentage
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 of the residents in four different Asian countries: the Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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. Staying in cities from 1970 to 2020, including predictions in both 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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,
Malaysia
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 got the highest
percentage
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 in the
last
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 40 years, and
Thailand
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 got the lowest,
Indonesia
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 started with the lowest
percentage
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 of the population living in cities compared to the other countries. On the one hand,
Indonesia
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 was the lowest in
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 in the first ten years from 1970 to 1980, with about 10%,
while
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 the Philippines got the highest
percentage
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 with around 30%,
Thailand
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 and
Malaysia
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 were in the middle with around ( 20% and 30%).
On the other hand
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, in the period of 1990 to 2040
Malaysia
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 increased in
percentage
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 from around 30% to 80%,
Indonesia
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also
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 increased from 1970 to 2000 and from 2000 to 2040,
while
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 the Philippines and
Thailand
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 were stable.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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