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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams.
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The pie charts illustrate the urban capital
comsumption
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consumption
 across important spending categories in the
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year
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years
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 1995 and 2011.
Overall
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,
its
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it is
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 evident that
food
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 consumption has
major
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 reduction and spending on transportation, medicine and clothing increased identically.
Firstly
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, In the
year
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 1995, half of the yearly
spendings
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spending
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 was only on
food
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. followed by 14
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percent
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per cent
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were
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apply
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spent on clothing,
10
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and 10
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percent
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per cent
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 fund
are
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 allocated for
recreation
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recreational
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 activities. remaining minor spendings were observed for residential, transportation, medicine,household facilities and other miscellaneous spending stands at lowest.
Secondly
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, In the
year
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 2011, capital allocated for
food
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 was reduced to 36
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percent
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per cent
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 and money reserved for transportation and recreation
were
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was
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 increased by 14
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percent
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per cent
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 and 7
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively. utilization on remaining
such
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 as residential,
recreation
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and recreation
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 have seen
minor
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a minor
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 increment. In conclusion, major consumption of
food
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 was reduced by 14
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percent
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per cent
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 from
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year
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the year
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 1995
tp
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to
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 2011. and utilization of household facilities
remain
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remains
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same
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the same
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with
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at
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 7
percent
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 utilization.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, food, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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