The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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of
trips
made by students aged 5-12 who
traveled
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travelled
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to and from school by various modes of transport in the
year
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years
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1990 and 2010. The total number of
trips
taken by children per year
are
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is
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measured in millions. In 1990, the highest and most preferred mode of transport was walking which reached
to
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apply
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a little above 12
million
trips
per year,
however
, the lowest would be children being car passengers. Using the bus was
also
preferred by many students as it was safer and cheaper. Cycling was done a lot by students
as well
as
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and
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it was easier to cycle to and from school. In 2010, being car passengers drastically
increasd
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increased
increase
from 4
million
trips
in 1990 to around 11
million
trips
in 2010. There
has been
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was
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a massive drop
for
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in
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walking to and from school in 2010 which fell from 12
million
to 6
million
. Cycling has
also
significantly dropped to around 2
million
in 2010 as well. Taking the bus
on the other hand
has slightly dropped but is still preferred by many.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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