You live in a small university town. Last week, you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price. You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However, this week, the laptop doesn't even switch on. Write to the store. In your letter: •tell the store where you live & what happened •explain the problem with the laptop •state what action you would like the store to take

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the laptop that I purchased from your store
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week. I live in a
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, which is far away from your store. And
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spent about two hours
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there,
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the fact that your shop is much
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cheaper than others. All week it was working properly without any defects.
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,
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morning when I was in a hurry to write an assignment, It did not even switch on. I was extremely disappointed because I needed it for my schoolwork.
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I watched videos
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YouTube to fix
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issue, but I could not do it. I am displeased with the quality of
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device. As I am unable to drive to your place, I demand that you send a repairman to solve
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problem.
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,
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laptop should be repaired on Wednesday
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week because of my essential project at school. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. Yours faithfully, Mohinur
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Provide a bit more detail about the laptop purchase in the introduction. For instance, mention the brand and model you bought.
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Clarify if the laptop has an error message or if there's any indicator when you try to switch it on. This can better assist the store to understand the problem.
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Include a brief explanation of how you hope the store can compensate you if a repair is not possible. For instance, mention a replacement or a refund.
coherence cohesion
Try to connect your paragraphs with more linking words to enhance the logical flow of your ideas.
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Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.
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You have clearly stated the actions you would like the store to take, which helps in conveying the urgency of your request.
coherence cohesion
The closing of the letter is strong and well-crafted, leaving a positive final impression.
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