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Many scientists are concerned about global warming. Research shows that the worldwide increase in temperature is getting worse. Furthermore, global warming seems to be related to levels of pollution in the atmosphere. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem.

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Many
scientists
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 are concerned about global warming.
Research
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 shows that the worldwide
increase
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 in
temperature
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 is getting worse.
Furthermore
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, global warming seems to be related to
levels
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 of
pollution
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 in the
atmosphere
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. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem. Many
scientists
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 are concerned about global warming.
Research
Use synonyms
 shows that the worldwide
increase
Use synonyms
 in
temperature
Use synonyms
 is getting worse.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, global warming seems to be related to
levels
Use synonyms
 of
pollution
Use synonyms
 in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem. Many
scientists
Use synonyms
 are concerned about global warming.
Research
Use synonyms
 shows that the worldwide
increase
Use synonyms
 in
temperature
Use synonyms
 is getting worse.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, global warming seems to be related to
levels
Use synonyms
 of
pollution
Use synonyms
 in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem. Many
scientists
Use synonyms
 are concerned about global warming.
Research
Use synonyms
 shows that the worldwide
increase
Use synonyms
 in
temperature
Use synonyms
 is getting worse.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, global warming seems to be related to
levels
Use synonyms
 of
pollution
Use synonyms
 in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
.
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task response
The repetition of the prompt does not address the question properly. Ensure you write a full essay that discusses both the causes of global warming and possible solutions.
coherence cohesion
Structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing the causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and include supporting details.
task response
Use specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points. Avoid repetition and develop your ideas thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay flows logically from one point to the next. Use transition words to help the reader follow your argument.
task response
The essay prompt is correctly identified and repeated, showing an understanding of the task.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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