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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year Summarise the information by selectign and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans depict how the southwest airport will be reconstructed next year.
Overall
, in contemporary times, the structures of the airport represent two trapezoids and a rectangle. After a redevelopment, the rectangle will be remodelled into three rectangles and a triangle and there will be a corner increased on the right of arrivals.
Initially
, the original location shows four marks, respectively "Check-in", "Cafe", "Walkway", and "Gates". The coffee shop and the check-in centre are located between the security passport control and the departures.
Then
 following to the rectangular region, the walkway is in
this
 area, around eight gates clockwise.
Subsequently
, there will be more marks constructed after a refurbishment;
however
, the walkway will be replaced by the sky train.
Firstly
, the bag drop will be marked at the corner on the left of the check-in centre, which will be left to right, and behind the coffee shop.
Secondly
, the car hire will be input into the extended corner, and the ATM and another coffee shop will be behind it.
Additionally
, the three rectangles will be around the 18 gates clockwise, which originally were 8.
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task achievement
Ensure to cover all the main features of the plans succinctly. Mentioning both existing and future structures gives clarity, but detail comparison which helps understanding the changes easily.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through your essay. This will improve the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Clearly separate introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion to enhance readability.
task achievement
The essay accurately identifies and describes the main features of the airport plans.
task achievement
The use of specific detail demonstrates a good comprehension of the diagrams.
coherence cohesion
There’s an attempt to logically structure the essay and compare features between the current and future states.

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