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The two maps below compare the changes in the village of Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.

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the residential area with blocks of houses has significantly increased, the farmland has been totally demolished. In the past, there was only one main road with a small bridge that went over the River Stoke at the top of the map. At the centre of the rural city, some residents and two shops were located just above the post office.

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, there was a small primary school.

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, on the southwest and northeast sides, Stokeford had a great reputation for farmland. What is more, just below the school, there was road access to gardens with large house blocks in them. Later on, in 2010, the region faced dramatic changes. Specifically, housing area development became more widespread.

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farming and shopping areas were destroyed, the office space was unaffected;

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, educational institutions improved in size.

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, green spaces decreased to half the size of the educational facilities, and retirement facilities improved.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

171 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

demolition
residential areas
infrastructure
urbanization
land use
farmlands
notable buildings
layout
developments
economic growth
population growth
amenities
transformation
expansion
reconstruction

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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.

The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

In some countries, students live at home with their family while they study at university, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do the advantages of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?