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The two pictures show the transformation of a city. Summarize the information in 150 words.

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The two maps illustrate the transformation of a
city
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 from 1986 to the present time.
First,
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in 1986, it showed that in the northwest area of the
city
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, there were some shops, a post office, and some houses.
Next,
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to the northeast of the area, there was a bridge and farmland, and roughly in the middle of the
city
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, a primary school existed.
Then
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, in the southeast, a large house had already been established, and a large garden was there. Afterwards, in the southwest, a river stroke and province were located side to side. As time went by, many things changed
according to
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 the needs of the surrounding community. On the other side, in the present day, in the northwest, there are some changes as the shops are replaced by housing, after that in the northeast, the province is knocked down to residence.
Subsequently
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, in the southeast, the large houses are converted into retirement homes. After that, in the southwest, the province is removed and replaced into dwellings with roads which is extended and connected to the main road. In summary, the
city
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 has experienced a tremendous alteration, which mainly focuses on building residents for the community.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay follows a clear and logical structure, making it easier for the reader to follow the transformation described.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to create smoother transitions between different parts of the essay. This will enhance the flow of your writing.
task achievement
While the essay covers the major changes, try to provide more specific details to make your descriptions more comprehensive and engaging.
task achievement
The essay makes a clear effort to describe the changes in different parts of the city, which shows a good understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
An introduction and conclusion are present, helping to frame the essay nicely.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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