In many countries, there is a growing gap between the technical skills of younger people and those over the age of fifty. What problems does this cause, and what solutions could minimise the problems?

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education
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skills
technology
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good ability of technical
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employers are doing well
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divergence.
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India
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countries
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education
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experienced
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technolgy
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scientists are magnificient
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labours
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countries
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too
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population
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need to improve begin primary
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clear water,
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supply. They don't have enough time to think possible how to improve a
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population. Eventually, it might
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consider the topic
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worldwide, not only
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variability expertise of employers,
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each
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when we had generated. now people would be help to others. Let us assist to ones of old
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