Nowadays many people wear western clothes rather than their traditional clothes. what are the resons for it? Is it a positive or negative development ?

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clothing
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clothings
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people
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preferring
to wear modern clothes rather than traditional clothes. There are reasons stated to support the trends which are based on
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and desire to update
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fashion
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development is good for society to
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maintain
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prestige. In support of
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development there are various reasons, primarily ,
people
thinking and desire to update themselves with
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fashion
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role.
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like
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to try new
clothings
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and
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styles
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which give them more comfort
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boost their
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to stand with their own lively personality.
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self-confidence
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can be gained by traditional wears but it
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resticted
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restricted
to family functions, and festivals, putting oneself in public
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person
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awkwardness or shyness. As
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factors could affect
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clothing sense
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which
people
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it is a positive
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development
for
people
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this
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brings
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multiculturism where everyone can adapt
new
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style
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styles
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which is
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a representation
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of mix culture clothing
style
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styles
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.
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, everyone can see
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themselves
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platform.
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,
pros
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the pros
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of traditional clothing should not be denied, though it
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varries
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varies
with different
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but
that is
the main inspiration
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the
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current
fasion
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fashion
.
To sum up
, my reasoning and prons updating oneself with current
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fashion
is very helpful to put
self
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the crowd
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also
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fulfil
desire to try
new
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a new
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style
and they can get
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knowledge
about different
clothings
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items of clothing
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. So, it can be concluded as
positive
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a positive
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change for
this
generation.
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