You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter • introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to ask for information about your spots club’s facilities
I am Asadbek
who
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
student
Add an article
a student
of
a Change preposition
at
collage
and I have been studying for 3 months in Correct your spelling
college
this
place and I was interested in several facilities of your club, therefore
I wanted to take part in your courses .
Firstly
, the best thing which was
I Unnecessary verb
apply
hear
from one of my friends about your club was your swimming pool, as I had taken part in Wrong verb form
heard
swimming
course 2 years ago Correct article usage
a swimming
however
we had to move another
town for my studies . Change preposition
to another
Second
main reason is the competition after a week which customized swimming and diving .
Add an article
The second
However
, I have
not Verb problem
do
known
several information about your courses , Wrong verb form
know
for
instance
the costs , times , members and coaches . Add the comma(s)
instance,
Firstly
, I would like to know times
of Correct article usage
the times
course
, because I have another course that I have to go Correct article usage
the course
almost
every day .
I would appreciate it if you could inform me as soon as possible and you could send the above-mentioned information which I asked Change preposition
to almost
to
my e-mail or my phone number (+9989999999)
Yours faithfully
AsadbekChange preposition
for to
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea. For instance, discussing the interest in the club and your personal background can be better separated.
complete response
Provide some background about why sports facilities are important to you or how they align with your interests.
suitable writing tone
Polite and formal tone maintained throughout the letter.
logical structure
Structure of the letter, including a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, is logical and easy to follow.
greeting and closing
The closing is appropriate and polite.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite