You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter • introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to ask for information about your spots club’s facilities I am Asadbek
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student
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collage
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and I have been studying for 3 months in
this
place and I was interested in several facilities of your club,
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I wanted to take part in your courses .
Firstly
, the best thing which
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from one of my friends about your club was your swimming pool, as I had taken part in
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course 2 years ago
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we had to move
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town for my studies .
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main reason is the competition after a week which customized swimming and diving .
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several information about your courses ,
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the costs , times , members and coaches .
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, I would like to know
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of
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, because I have another course that I have to go
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every day . I would appreciate it if you could inform me as soon as possible and you could send the above-mentioned information which I asked
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my e-mail or my phone number (+9989999999) Yours faithfully Asadbek
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea. For instance, discussing the interest in the club and your personal background can be better separated.
complete response
Provide some background about why sports facilities are important to you or how they align with your interests.
suitable writing tone
Polite and formal tone maintained throughout the letter.
logical structure
Structure of the letter, including a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, is logical and easy to follow.
greeting and closing
The closing is appropriate and polite.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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