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The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assessment over the school year?

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 the traditional
assessments
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 system for
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have
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 been
primary
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 method.
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,
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 number of schools moved into the contemporary assessment for evaluating
students
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. I support the new approach to
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students
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than old-fashioned assessment. To start with, many schools have
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 the utilization of new
technique
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 to evaluate
students
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 for several reasons. The major ground is that conventional
technique
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 put significant pressure on
students
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’ mentality and physical abilities. Traditional techniques for estimating
students
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 do not have any
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to
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 their knowledge aptitudes. Take me as an example, a year ago
i
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 had a terrible accident with my bicycle
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,
i
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 had to prepare for my literature exam owing to disaster I could not prepare for that exam in order to accumulate the average score,
consequently
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i
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 failed it.
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, many
students
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 are able to memorize answers without properly understanding them.
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, other educational institutions consider that modern methods are more sustainable due its
high quality
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 experiences. As an explanation, new techniques demand presentations and talks about the topic by
students
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.
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,
this
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 kind of contemporary
assessments
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assessment
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 can easily illuminate the weaknesses of
students
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 and performance abilities.
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 why swarms of institutions shifted to new
evaluations
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 methods. In summary,
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although
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, estimation techniques play a vital role in determining
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the knowledges
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knowledges
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knowledge
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 of
students
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. I mainly reckon traditional assessments are not viable
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students
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.

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The essay starts with a clear introduction, but ensure that the thesis statement is more explicit about the stance taken.
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There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrases, such as 'the traditional assessments system for students have been primary method.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer wording.
coherence cohesion
Better organize the arguments. While the essay has good points, they could be structured in a more logical flow to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Include transitional phrases to ensure smooth flow between ideas. This will help improve the coherence of the essay.
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Provide additional relevant examples and explanations to strengthen the points made.
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The essay discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of traditional and continuous assessment methods, showing an understanding of the subject.
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The use of personal experience adds a personal touch and makes the argument more relatable.
coherence cohesion
The essay is generally easy to follow, and the main points are clearly identifiable.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • current trend
  • traditional exams
  • continuous assessment
  • school year
  • deeper understanding
  • ongoing feedback
  • improvement
  • pressure
  • stress
  • real-life situations
  • continuous learning
  • evaluation
  • abilities
  • progress
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