The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map illustrates the town of Garlsdon, with a population of 65,000, and shows two possible sites for a new supermarket,
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S1 and S2. Site S1 is located to the northwest, in the countryside near housing. It is adjacent to a main road, providing access to
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towns like Hindon (12 km away) and is near the railway line.
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, S1 is outside the town
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, possibly less convenient for some residents who live
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away. Its location in the countryside might
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attract more shoppers from surrounding areas. Site S2 is in the town
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, within the no-traffic zone, surrounded by housing and the industrial area, and closer to the railway. Its central location makes it more accessible, though the no-traffic zone could complicate access for car users.
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, S2 would likely benefit from the high pedestrian traffic in the area.
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, both sites offer proximity to population
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but differ in accessibility, potential footfall, and ease of transportation for shoppers.
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  • residential area
  • transportation infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • environmental impact
  • green space preservation
  • noise pollution
  • local wildlife
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • boost to local businesses
  • property values
  • competitive landscape
  • consumer choice
  • community feedback
  • stakeholders
  • support
  • opposition
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