People have different views on how to reduce traffic congestion by governments. Some think it can be solved by building more train and subway lines, while others believe building more roads and widening existing roads will reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue
whether
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to build
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more
train
and
subway
lines leads to decreased
the
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traffic
jam
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. I will explain why building
subway
lines
are
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more vital than expanding the current road.
Firstly
, the
subway
line
is
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a key method of transportation recently.
This
is mainly
due to
the fact that low-income groups could utilise it without incurring a high cost.
For instance
, the price of
taxi
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increases
soarely
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sorely
solely
soared
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midnight, but the price of
train
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stays
in
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constant until the
last
train
.
Hence
, constructing more
train
stations would benefit more in terms of the cost from the perspective of customers to solve
congestion
.
Secondly
, installing new
subway
lines would be more easily to be projected by the government.
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reason is that the area of land required to purchase for building more stations is lower than renovating the road in present.
For example
, roads could be hard to connect in a
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since some
of
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forests
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are restricted
with
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the green belt.
In other words
, some people may claim that there are more drivers on the street than people in the station, which would solve
congestion
by creating more
spaces
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. Apparently, the statistic shows that statement is true in terms of the number.
However
, it doesn't take tourists into
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account as the majority of tourists prefer
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public transport over renting a car. Having considered both views, making new
train
stations would be more important to solve
congestion
.
Also
, I would suggest that imposing
the
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tax
for
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congestion
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the congestion
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could reduce the usage of
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the car
a car
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car
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during a busy
holliday
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holiday
.
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