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When you last experience the time when you experienced the significant personal growth ?

#time #growth
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 a time when I experienced
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significant personal growth.
Last
 year, I
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joined my new
compnay
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company
 as a Software Engineer,and at the
start
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 it
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was
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 difficult
foe
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for
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 me to understand their codebase.During these
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typical
typically
days
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 our manager
assign
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 the tasks which
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 the deadline of one week.As we are two resources the other
persion
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person
 is senior
than
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 me.But
unfortunately
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 the other person got
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 and he had to take
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day
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 off from the office.Now I really work hard and put extra effort in order to complete the project and I was determined enough to
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hit
 the ground running and I completed the project
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successfully
.
As from
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 my personal experience, I believe that If the person has good intent to do
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 and he gives his hundred
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 to
this
 task
then
 he will
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definitely
 be
successfull
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successful
.
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coherence cohesion
Try to improve the overall structure of your essay by organizing it into clear paragraphs. There should be an introduction, a body, and a conclusion. This helps in making your essay easier to read and understand.
task achievement
Ensure that you present your main points clearly and support them with specific examples. Your essay should not only recount an event but also reflect on its impact on your personal growth.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling mistakes. This will make your essay more professional and polished. Consider revising phrases like 'there is a time when I experienced' to 'there was a time when I experienced'.
task achievement
Add more details to your narrative to give the reader a clearer picture of the situation and your growth. Describe your feelings, challenges, and what you learned more comprehensively.
task achievement
It's great that you persevered and completed the project on your own, showing your determination and dedication.
coherence cohesion
Your essay reflects a strong personal experience that led to your growth, which is a good example to share.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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