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Writing Samples
Band 4

Group study is more beneficial than study alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #study
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Some people argue that
studies
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 in a group is more better than seeking knowledge through online media at home. I strongly agree that
the
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group studies grant more creativity and strong communication skills to students. To commence
with
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,
team work
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teamwork
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 in any field of life
develop
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 comprehension
concepts
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 and
captured
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the
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people
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 interest
to
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 the specific point of discussion. Long discussions , different arguments ,and convenience consequences result in better understanding in class. The participants have distinct cognitive skills and
mismatch
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standard
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 of deliberation , which result in better
score
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.
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, the team strategy assists the student who has worse neuroplasticity could compete
the
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 other one who
prefer
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study
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to study
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 alone. As an example,
leading
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 research organization in America has shown that the batch students had
clear
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perception
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 and concepts than others who presented in
disperse
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 mode.
In addition
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, education with peers
teach
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 the way of communication both verbally and orally. Continuous justification and disagreement overcome their inner fear of uncertainty to speak and create bonding with
others
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 fellows.
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, scholars act more confidently in front of audiences and justify their points of view with better thoughts and references.
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,
Australia
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 Educational Society survey has concluded that 70
percent
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toppers
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 have to face difficulties in their final interviews
due to
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lack
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 of self-reliance. In conclusion,
although
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 breakthrough technologies have greater benefits for training
youngster
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youngsters
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, I believe that the traditional method of task completion is more vibrant to enhance vision in accomplishment and connection with folks.
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task response
While your essay addresses the topic and takes a clear position, make sure to stay focused on comparing group study with studying alone, as specified in the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly from one idea to another. Use more cohesive devices and linking words to enhance the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Although your introduction and conclusion are well-presented, try to make your arguments in the body paragraphs more interconnected.
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Support your main points with more detailed examples and elaboration to strengthen your arguments.
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Clarify your points to make sure your argument is both clear and well-developed. Some sentences could be rephrased for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
You have successfully provided an introduction and a conclusion, which frames the essay well.
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Your essay does a good job of taking a clear position on the topic.
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You included specific examples to support your points, which helps in making your arguments more convincing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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