There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sport center that you visit you have complained several times but with no success Write letter to the manager of the sport center in your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing room is •say what happened the last times you complained •explain what you want the manager to do
Dear sir or madam
I am writing in order to complain about
changing
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the changing
room
's problems.
I come to this
sport
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sports
center
once every two days. Sport
equipment of the Correct your spelling
The sports
sport
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sports
center
is of good quality and new Change the spelling
centre
however
changing
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the changing
room
is always dirty. In addition
to this
there Add a comma
this,
is
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are
not
personal lockers.
I have written a letter of complaint several times before the changing Correct your spelling
no
room
was cleaned when l came but a few days later the room
was dirty again. To make matters worse there aren't personal lockers yet. I once lost my wallet and money in changing
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the changing
room
. I am not at all pleased Change preposition
with that
that
because l am crazy about working in Correct word choice
apply
this
sport
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sports
center
because most of the people working in Change the spelling
centre
this
sport
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sports
center
are my friends. Change the spelling
centre
In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
this
place is near my house that's why l like here
. I would like to request that you fix the changing Correct pronoun usage
it here
room
. I am looking forward to hearing from you
Your
faithfully
Turayeva RayhonaCorrect the word
Yours
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coherence cohesion
Try to develop each idea more fully in its own paragraph. For example, separate the description of the problem, your previous complaints, and your requests to the manager into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Elaborate on what specific measures you expect the manager to take to resolve the issues with the changing room, such as regular cleaning schedules or installing personal lockers.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a clear and polite tone, appropriate for the context of a complaint to a manager.
task achievement
You clearly describe the problem with the changing room and mention your past complaints, which helps emphasize the recurrent nature of the issue.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite