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Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. •Apologize for damaging the product •Explain what happened •Say how are you going to fix issue

#friend #•apologize #product #•explain #•say
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Dear Marjona, I think you are good and you
studies
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 too.
Firstly
, please give me a chance to explain and apologise. I do not know how to apologise enough for my mistake. I was so excited to have had your
laptop
. Because I had a
lof
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 of
works
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 to do with it and plans as well. I took your
laptop
 to my office. And on the
way
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 there was very unpleasant weather.
There
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It
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 was sunny when I caught
taxi
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a taxi
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, after that we saw heavy fog,so we could not see anything.
Moreover
, as I mentioned, there was
a
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sunny weather before the taxi and we opened the windows for cute wind. I can say that we have never thought about the fog.
Furthermore
,
taxi
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the taxi
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 driver could not control the car. We hit a big stone,we were thrown by
car
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a car
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 other side of the road and we lost our temper.
Then
 I threw the
laptop
 out the window. I would be terribly shocked the whole week in the hospital
due to
 the
laptop
 was thrown by me but how because
of
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I held it in my hands
.
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Hopefully, I will buy a new
laptop
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next
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 month.I would like to meet you at your cafe and give it.
Additionally
 to
this
, I can buy everything you want
for
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to
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 apologise, as you know I work in
the
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a
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 well-paid job. I believe my apologies will be accepted. I
wait
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 your letter,send it as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Feruzabonu.
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task achievement
The letter does cover all three tasks: apologizing, explaining, and proposing a solution, but the explanation could be clearer and more concise.
coherence cohesion
Consider providing more detailed and logical connections between events to enhance the clarity of your explanation.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph conveys a single main idea to improve overall organization and coherence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, adding a personal touch.
task achievement
The tone is generally suitable for a letter to a friend, displaying honesty and sincerity.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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