You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but camera has still no been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: ●Introduce yourself ●Explain the situation ●Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear sir or madam I am writing to express my

dissapointment

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disappointment

with

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the

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camera that I bought it from your store a few weeks ago. My name is Raxmon Kamolov and I have been a regular customer of your company for many months and I often purchase soo many electronic

equipments

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types of equipment

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from your store. I would

advice

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advise

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many of my

friend

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friends

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to use

this

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store. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to

the

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is the

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camera that I bought

few

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a few

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weeks ago is not working very well.

Then

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I contact the office manager about

this

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mistake.

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However

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they did not do anything. I would

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appreciate

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appreaciate

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appreciate

it if you could give me a full

refound

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refund

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or replace my camera and

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would like to have a punishment with your managers I look forward to your reply and

solve

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my problem. Raxmon Kamolov Yours faithfully

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task achievement

Focus on more specific details about the problem with the camera. For example, mention what specific problem has occurred and how it affects the use of the camera.

coherence cohesion

Improve the clarity of your request. Instead of 'punishment with your managers,' perhaps say 'address the issue with your managerial staff to ensure better customer service in the future.'

task achievement

You have effectively introduced yourself and described your history as a regular customer, which strengthens the context of your complaint.

greeting and closing

The opening and closing lines of your letter are polite and appropriate for a formal letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

146 words

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