There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sport centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre In your letter ●describe what the problem with the changing rooms is ●say what happened the last times you complained ●explain what you want the manager to do
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to
complaint
about problems with changing rooms in your sports centre in London.
When I went to your Replace the word
complain
sport
centre, I realized that there are enough technologies for doing Change the noun form
sports
sport
and achieve
goals in Wrong verb form
achieving
Add an article
the sport
sport
industry. Change the noun form
sports
However
, I want to tell about
your changing Correct pronoun usage
you about
room
. Firstly
, it was very small and that's why I feel like
uncomfortable. Because there were a lot of girls in Wrong verb form
felt
changing
Correct article usage
the changing
room
. Secondly
, there were
a lack of clothes racks Change the verb form
was
that is
to say not enough. Last
times
when I went to Fix the agreement mistake
time
Correct article usage
the sport
sport
centre , I didn't find racks to put my clothes Fix the agreement mistake
sports
and
IChange preposition
on and
have
to put my things in my own car.
Wrong verb form
had
Although
,
I have already complained several times, nothing has been done yet. I wantRemove the comma
apply
they
Correct pronoun usage
them
change
Fix the infinitive
to change
room
Correct article usage
the room
with
another Change preposition
to
room
or make it bigger due to
convenient
. And I would be grateful Replace the word
convenience
there
Correct word choice
if there
are
more clothes racks so people wouldn't have problems with each other. I look forward to your reply and resolution to my problem.
Yours faithfully
ShodiyonaWrong verb form
were
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coherence cohesion
The letter is a bit disjointed in terms of the logical structure. It is advisable to clearly separate each concern into distinct paragraphs to enhance readability.
task achievement
Include specific examples or instances to support your complaints. This can provide more context and make your concerns more compelling.
task achievement
You have clearly addressed the problems with the changing rooms and your previous complaints.
suitable writing tone
The tone is mostly suitable for a formal complaint letter, maintaining a polite and respectful tone throughout.
greeting and closing
You included a greeting and a closing, which makes your letter look more complete.