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The diagram below displays the life cycle of a frog. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below displays the life cycle of a frog. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provided reveals
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frog’s
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the frog’s
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 life cycle.
Overall
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cyclical
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the cyclical
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 and natural process goes through 6 stages(mating,
frog
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 spawns, emergence of small
tadpoles
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, development of
tadpoles
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, young
frog
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 and mature
frog
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) with one material(
frog
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 spawns) and without any equipment.
Procedure
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The procedure
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 starts with
mating
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the mating
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 of male and female
frogs
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 and ends with
mature
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a mature
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frog
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 coming out of
water
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the water
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. First of all adult
frogs
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mates
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mate
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 in order to
left
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leave
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offsprings
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offspring
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. After that F gender
frog
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 leaves
spawns
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spawn
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 under water. Small
tadpoles
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 with big
head
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heads
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 and long
tail
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tails
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came
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come
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 out of spawns and
goes
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go
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 to the next stage of evolution.
Following
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this
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, small
tadpoles
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 develop and
little
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the little
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frog
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’s head gets smaller.
Moreover
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, in that stage
frogs
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 grow their legs. In the next
phase
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phase,
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 young
frogs
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 grow their arms, their head and tail get smaller and body
gets
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get
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 bigger.
Certain
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A certain
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 time later, young
frogs
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 became mature
frogs
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. They throw their tails and their body gets larger.
In
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 the end of
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the process
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process
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process,
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 mature
frogs
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came
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come
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 out of
water
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the water
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 and
cyclical
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the cyclical
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 process continues.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frog, tadpoles, frogs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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