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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
production
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 of milk annually in four countries
Netherlands
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,
Australia
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, Tanzania and Guatemala, over the course of 20 years, between 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 reached the maximum
amount
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 in litres with 11,466,000 in 2010,
while
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 the lowest was Guatemala with 84,000
amount
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 in litres in 2010.
To begin
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 with,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Australia
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 were nearly the same
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amount
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amounts
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 in 1990 ( 11,262,000 and 11,246,000 respectively ),
However
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, in 2000
Netherlands
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 and
Australia
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 showed a
decreased
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 in the
production
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 of milk with 11,155,000 for
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and 11,105,000 for
Australia
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,
Therefore
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, in 2010
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had increased the
amount
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 of milk with 11,466,000
while
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Australia
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 had a decreased the
production
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 with 9,165,000.
On the other hand
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, Tanzania
had
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apply
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increased
the
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its
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production
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 in the all period starting from 87,000 in 1990, 1,42,000 in 2000 and 1,55,00 in 2010,
in Addition
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, Guatemala
also
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 increased
the
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its
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production
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 with 26,000 in 1990, 55,000 in 2000 and 84,000 in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, netherlands, australia, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annually
  • production
  • trends
  • increased
  • decreased
  • significantly
  • comparatively
  • figures
  • ranking
  • summarize
  • observations
  • patterns
  • consistently
  • growth
  • decline
  • noticeable
  • highlight
  • emphasize
  • yearly
  • countries
  • data
  • support
  • insights
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