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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables compare the
amount
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 of
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in five different European
countries
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 in 1999 and 2004 in millions of
euros
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
sales
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 rose dramatically in most
countries
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 for both products.
Also
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, it is apparent that Switzerland citizens have bought more bananas and coffee compared to other
countries
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. By looking at the table for
sales
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 of coffee, the
sales
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 in the UK rose sharply from 1999 to 2004.
While
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 the
amount
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 of
sales
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 was 1.5
million
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euros
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 in 1999, it reached 20
million
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. For Switzerland, the value became doubled that of 1999, 6
million
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euros
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.
However
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, the changes for other
countries
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 were not so substantial.
While
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 the
amount
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 for Belgium changed to 1.7
million
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euros
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 from 1
million
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, the
amount
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 of
sales
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 for both Denmark and Sweden experienced a 0.2
million
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euros
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 increase, from 1.8 and 0.8 to 2 and 1, respectively. Regarding the table about bananas, the
sales
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 in Switzerland increased from 15
million
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euros
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 to 47
million
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euros
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.
Also
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, the change for the UK was significant, it rose from 1 to 5.5
million
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euros
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.
While
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 the
amount
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 for Belgium jumped from 0.6 to 4, Sweden and Denmark experienced a decrease, from 1.8 and 2 to 1 and 0.9
million
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euros
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, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sales, countries, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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