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Task 1 Question: The chart below shows the results of a survey people coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

Task 1 Question: The chart below shows the results of a survey people coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities
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The pie chart provides key information about the result of survival for
people
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people's
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 habitats in drinking and buying
coffee
 and tea in five Australian cities. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Melbourne has a significant percentage
about
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of
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people
went
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who went
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 to the
cafe
 in the
last
 four weeks,with nearly two-thirds.
In addition
,Hobart had
large
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a large
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 amount of
people
went
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who went
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 to the
cafe
 about 63 proportion ,
whereas
people
 who bought
coffee
 had nearly 55 per cent.
According to
 what is shown,Sydnian
people
 demonstrated
a
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the
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 highest portion In went to
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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 by approximately 62%
while
 bought fresh
coffee
 had less than 45 per cent. Melbourne had the majority
people
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of people
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 who went to the
cafe
, with around 63
ratio
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ratios
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, compared to other cities. In terms of, Brisbane and Adelaide, had an equivalent portion in bought fresh
coffee
.
while
 Brisbane demonstrated
at
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a
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 56 ratio
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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