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“By definition, charity is generosity in offering money, food, and help to the needy. To some people, such kindness should be boundless, others argue for a limit to it.” Which opinion do you support? In about 300 words, present your arguments.

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bar chart gives information about how many
school
trips
 to and from
school
 students make
according to
 five methods of transport (car passenger, walking, cycling, walking and
bus
,
bus
) in a nation between 1990 and 2010. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
,
while
 walking was by far the most popular way of transport in 1990 it can be seen that there is a noticeable trend towards getting to
school
 by car. With regard to walking, students used
this
 as their preferred method with over 12
million
trips
 per year in 1990. Within the shown period of 20 years,
this
 figure drops to 6
million
trips
.
In contrast
, travelling by car as a passenger increased from just over 4
million
 to approximately 11
million
 in the same timeframe, making it the most popular way of transport in 2010. Looking specifically at the other three categories, students took on average 6
million
trips
 each to and from
school
 in 1990. By 2010, these figures decreased. Particularly the
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cost
 of using a bicycle dramatically lowered, dropping to 2
million
trips
 per year. Walking and
bus
 rides
as well as
 just taking the
bus
 decreased by approximately one-half and one-
third,
respectively.
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structure
Introduce a brief conclusion to summarize the main findings. This will provide a clearer structure to your essay.
examples
Include more detailed comparisons or examples to illustrate the changes and trends observed in the data.
understanding
The essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the data, offering a thorough description of trends over time.
language
The use of comparative language is effective in highlighting the changes between 1990 and 2010.
organization
The essay is well-organized, with paragraphs that logically follow one another and discuss specific points clearly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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