You are planning to go on a business trip. Write an email to the Human Resources Department that includes the following information: Where are you going? What is the purpose of your trip? How long will you be staying? What is your itinerary (the places you will visit)? Who will you meet? Why are you going? Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

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Dear Ms. HR I'm planning to go on a business trip. My leader told me I
will
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go onsite in Tokyo, Japan. I will work as
monitor
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a monitor
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,
like
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apply
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tracking, finding
root
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the root
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cause
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causes
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and supporting
to
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the customers. I will stay for two weeks. I would like to visit some popular places in Japan like Fuji mountain,
temples
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and temples
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. I am very excited because
i
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will meet a lot of
peoples
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people
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. I will see my co-workers in the office every day and
sometime
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sometimes
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i
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will go out to meet the customers. I would like to inform you about my trip
start
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next
monday
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Monday
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so
i
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will not
at
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be at
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office
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the office
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during
this
time. Best regards Quan Le
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grammar
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and free from errors. For example, you should say "to monitor" instead of "as monitor."
content
Try to use more specific examples or further details to enhance clarity and engagement. For instance, specify which temples you plan to visit in Japan.
structure
Adding a brief closing statement to summarize your email can help in providing a clear conclusion to your message.
content
You have covered all required information as instructed.
structure
The email structure includes greetings and a sign-off, which adds to the formal nature required in a business email.
tone
You mention excitement about meeting people and the places you plan to visit, which adds a personal touch.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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