In some countries, secondary education focuses in depth on two or three subjects, while in others students take a large number of subjects. Which system do you think is better?
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, studying huge number
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numbers
Secondly
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the human's
human's
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human
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types
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nitrogen
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demonstrates
countries
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dates
earth
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the earth
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Physics
the
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countries
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a high
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students
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the high
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