You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been rapired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: #introduce yourself #explain the situation #say what action you would like the company to take

#camera #home #company #representative #week #situation #action

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to company

representitive

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representative

representatives

a complaint with you regarding poor service.Let me introduce yourself.My full name is Komiljonova Komilaxon.I am

regular

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a regular

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customer. I went

your

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shop on Thursday,25th July.

While

I was in your shop,I bought a new

camera

for my family trip.Because

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camera

was essential for taking family photos on a trip.I bought

and

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it and

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I found it had some problems when I got home.Suddenly,I returned

camera

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the camera

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and spoke to the company representative five days ago.But the

camera

has still not been repaired.Your workers

said

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"we will fix it in 2 days".But, five days passed.There is still no

new

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news

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from them.I

also

postponed our family trip because of a broken

camera

. I am asking you to fix my

camera

as soon as possible.I would be grateful if you could fix my

camera

soon.I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. Yours faithfully, Komiljonova Komilaxon

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task achievement

Make sure to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter, especially when addressing the reader and detailing the situation.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea or purpose, with smooth transitions between them for better flow.

task achievement

You effectively introduced yourself and explained the situation clearly.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a logical structure and a polite closing.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

7.5

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

7.5

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

152 words

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