You recently stayed a hotel for a conference with your company and there was several problems with your room.Write to the hotel management to complain.Include #Where you stayed #What the problems were #How they can fix your complaints

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing in order to complain about a shortage of your
hotel
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's rooms.I made up my mind about stayed your
hotel
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with my company.We thought that the conditions of the
hotel
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were excellent.But we are wrong in
this
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choice. First of all,we came to the
hotel
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and paid for rooms.We chose
lux
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a lux
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room.
However
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,there were several problems in the room when we came into
room
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the room
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.
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,we are 5 people but there are a few sofas.
Bathroom
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The bathroom
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did not clean and the headlight did not work.
Rooms
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The rooms
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was
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were
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also
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unsatisfactory.We were deceived.If we ask others,they took very little money from them.But, they took twice as much from us.We got angry. We would like you will receive a full refund
our
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of our
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money.We will stay
another
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at another
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hotel
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for
conference
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a conference
the conference
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.I look forward to hearing from your reply. Yours sincerely, Komiljonova Komilaxon

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task achievement
Your letter covers all the necessary points, but ensure complete clarity by specifying the exact date and duration of your stay.
coherence cohesion
Use smoother transitions between your points. For instance, 'Moreover' or 'Additionally' can help the flow of ideas.
task achievement
Your letter maintains a polite yet firm tone, which is suitable for a complaint.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal for this context.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with...
  • ...which I encountered during my recent stay at...
  • The first issue was...
  • Additionally, I found that...
  • Moreover, the... was not up to standard.
  • I suggest that...
  • This experience has left me...
  • I hope you will address these concerns promptly by...
  • To improve your service, you could...
  • As a form of compensation, I would appreciate...
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