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the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
#households #income
The bar chart provides information about the amount of
annaul
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annual
income
 of households in the United
State
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States
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 for the years 2001, 2001, and 2015.
It is clear that
 the
majoruti
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majority
 of households earned higher
income
 in 2007 and 2015.
In contrast
,in 2001,most of
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the housedhold
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housedhold
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household
households
have
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had
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lowe
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low
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 annual
income
. Looking at the
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information
 In more
detall
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detail
,the
number
 of
househild
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households
household
earn
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earning
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 $100,00 or more was around
33million
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a 33million
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 in 2015,which was the highest figure
than
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in
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 other years .
While
 the volume of
household
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households
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 having $75,000 - $99,999 annual
Income
 exhibited
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similar
number
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numbers
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 between
apprpximately
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approximately
 12 million and 15
milton
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million
.
Moreover
,as can be
seem
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seen
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 the
number
 of
household
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households
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eraing
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earning
erasing
 $50,
ooo-$74,999
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or-$74,999
anuual
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annual
income
also
 slowed
idetical
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identical
 figures,around 20 million
druing
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during
 the
divern
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given
 period. In terms of the
number
 of
household
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households
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 having $25,00-$49,999 was 26million in 2007 and rose to around 29miooln in 2001.
Bt
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By
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 2015,the
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number
drecres
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decrees
 to
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a 28million
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28million
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28 million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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