The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010.
The table represents the percentage of
adults
from urban and rural areas who participated in four different leisure activities
: reading, animated play, playing, and photography, in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that reading was the most popular free time activities
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activity
whereas
that
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apply
of
the others were competing its popularity Change preposition
apply
among
each other in Change preposition
with
both
years. However
, it is interesting to note that there were some changes found in trends of activities
in urban adults
, while
that of those in rural areas remained constant.
Starting in 1990, at 71%, reading accounted for the largest percentage among all activities
in adults
living rural
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in rural
area
, followed by, playing and animated play, at 26%, and at 18%, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Hence
, reading also
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is also
trendy
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a trendy
activities
found in Fix the agreement mistake
activity
adults
who dwelled in the cities at
61%, but the figures of those who enjoy playing now Change preposition
apply
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overtake
the
animated play at 21%. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, although
photography is the least preferable acitivity
found in Correct your spelling
activity
both
locations, the number of those from the rural were
double that of Change the verb form
was
urban
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the urban
area
at 14%.
In 2010, trends of Fix the agreement mistake
areas
activities
from both
regions were varied, except reading
that Change preposition
for reading
remarkably
high at the same rate of 78%. Photography Add a missing verb
was remarkably
seem
to capture Change the verb form
seems
peoples'
attention with the 10% rise in Correct your spelling
people's
both
groups. While
playing remained the constant in rural area
at 26%, only 14% of the urban Fix the agreement mistake
areas
adults
continue to do this
. Lastly
, animated plays
popularity Change noun form
plays'
play's
for
urban people Change preposition
among
are
the same, but in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
rural
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the rural
area
declinedFix the agreement mistake
areas
4
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by 4
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