The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010.(rewrite)

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010.(rewrite)
The table shows the percentage of adults from urban and rural
areas
who participated in four different leisure activities—reading, animated plays, playing, and photography—in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, reading was the most popular leisure
activity
in
both
urban and rural
areas
for
both
years. The other activities showed varying degrees of popularity, with noticeable changes over time, particularly in urban
areas
,
while
rural trends remained relatively stable. In 1990, reading accounted for the highest percentage of participants in rural
areas
at 71%, followed by playing at 26%, and animated plays at 18%. In urban
areas
, reading was
also
the most popular
activity
at 61%, with playing at 21%, and animated plays slightly lower. Photography was the least preferred
activity
in
both
regions, but rural
participation
was double that of urban
areas
, at 14%. By 2010, the trends had shifted. Reading remained highly popular, with
participation
rates rising to 78% in
both
urban and rural
areas
. Photography gained popularity, increasing by 10% in
both
groups.
While
playing remained constant in rural
areas
at 26%, it dropped to 14% among urban adults. Animated plays saw a decline in rural
areas
by 4%,
while
urban
participation
remained the same. In conclusion, reading consistently remained the most
favored
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activity
across
both
regions and years,
while
the other activities experienced varying levels of
participation
, with notable changes
especially
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, especially
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in urban
areas
over the 20-year period.
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