The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The diagram above illustrates the expenditure on three different categories,among five different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004 .
People
under 30 spend 5 per
cent
on groceries,
however
, they spend on
restaurants
and
hotels
just under 15 per
cent
,
In addition
, they spend a little over 5 per
cent
on
entertainment
.
On the other hand
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,
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people
aged between 31 and 45 spend approximately the same money on food and drinks ,
restaurants
and
hotels
they
also
spend around 7.5 per
cent
on
entertainment
. The
people
aged 46 to 60 are just over 15 per
cent
and they spend around 7.5 on both
entertainment
,
restaurants
and
hotels
. The
people
aged 61 to 75 use only 2 percent
on
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restaurants
and
hotels
, and around 20 Percent on
entertainment
and groceries . On the other side
people
aged over 76 spend above 22.5 per
cent
,
also
they spend just above 5 Percent but they spend a little under 15 per
cent
.
Overall
, the used money on groceries and
entertainment
increased significantly by getting older , and the expenditure on
hotels
and
restaurants
fell by getting older .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cent, restaurants, hotels, entertainment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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