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Studying the english language in an english-speaking country is the best but not the only wat to learn the language. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#english #language #country #wat
Generally, learning
English
 is best done by studying
on
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English
-speaking nations yet, there are other alternatives to
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 the
language
. In
this
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 I will discuss
on
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why I agree on other ways to learn the international
language
 but
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 that the best way to know it is by first-hand experience of living
on
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English
-speaking countries.
Overall
, you can educate yourself on
English
 by consuming visual and audio materials
such
 as films, videos and songs. These mediums will help you stimulate your senses and learn the
language
 through convenience. An example of
this
 is Korean people speaking
English
 phrases by watching their
favorite
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 film stars.
Also
, native Chinese people learn to speak some words just by listening to their
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English
 music icon. As
the
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 result of patronizing different mediums,
the
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non-native
English
 speakers learn to speak basic
English
.
On the other hand
, learning
English
 through living
on
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in
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English
-speaking countries
such
 as
United
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 States, Canada and
United
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 Kingdom will make you learn to use
English
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language
 for day-to-day transactions. Through constant
interactions
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 the speaking skill set is honed
,
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 and will be improved as you constantly practice
on
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using it.
Additionally
, the person may be pushed to use the
language
 not just for entertainment but for survival.
For instance
, Filipinos who migrated to
United
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 States use
English
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language
,
as a
result
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 there is
a
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data acknowledging Filipinos as the
third best
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English
 speakers in the world. In conclusion, there are many ways to
acquire learning
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 of
English
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language
 yet the best medium to understand the
language
 is through learning
on
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it
by
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in
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English
-speaking countries.
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To enhance task response, add more details and examples related to studying English in non-English-speaking countries via structured courses or online platforms.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by refining transitions between paragraphs to create a smoother reading flow and link ideas more naturally.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by organizing arguments more clearly, ensuring each paragraph focuses on one main idea and develops it thoroughly.
task achievement
The essay clearly presents a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument about the best way to learn English.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively included, providing a clear framework for the essay.
task achievement
Specific examples, such as Koreans learning English through films and the recognition of Filipinos as proficient English speakers, strengthen the arguments made.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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