The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph
dipicts
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depicts
the information
of
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on
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grown ups
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grown-ups
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participating
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participation
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in various major sports in a place, in years the 1997 and 2017.
Overall
, Tennis stands
on
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the top game played by
highest
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the highest
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number of
individuals
in both
the
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years. basketball was played by least in
year
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the year
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the 1997 and cricket
stands
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at
bottom
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in the
year
2017
Firstly
, Tennis is most played by
yound
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young
adults
that is
fifty
thousand
individuals
played
in
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year
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1997 and around
fiftyfive
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fifty five
fifty-five
people played
in
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it in
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the
year
2017. In 1997 basketball was played by 9
thousand
individuals
and
lowest
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is cricket stands at the lowest with 80thousand
individuals
playing.
Secondly
,
drastic
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increase in
individuals
playing Football and Rugby was observed in the
year
2017 compared with
individauls
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individuals
playing in 1997.
Moreover
,
matured
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humans participating in swimming
is
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are
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same
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the same
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for both
the
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years which is around
thirtyfive
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thirty-five
thirty five
thousand
. and
individuals
experiancing
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experiencing
Golf
is
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slightly increased in
year
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the year
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2017 from 1997 by
thousand
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a thousand
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participations. In conclusion,
individals
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individuals
playing sports increased in
year
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the year
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2017 in
comparosion
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comparison
with
year
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the year
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1997.
However
,
its
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opposite
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the opposite
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for cricket.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, year, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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