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Some people think that in a city, the best way to travel by car, while other people argue that by yckes are a better way of travelling in a city. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #city #travel #car #yckes
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Some
people
argued
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argue
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 that a journey
via
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by
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 car is the best option in the
city
,
whereas
 other individuals believe that travel by bicycle is better. Both perspectives merit consideration.
Traveling
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Travelling
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 by car is indeed
viable
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a viable
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 and convenient
choise
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choice
 for navigating urban conditions. In
this
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these
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 terms, cars and other
transports
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transport
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servises
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services
 can quite safe time in big
city
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cities
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 which
provide
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allows
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 us
move
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to move
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 faster on the road.
Therefore
, as long as
people
 prioritise cars for
the
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apply
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movement, they can avoid staying in extreme
conditiins
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conditions
.
That is
 a reason to utilize the car for
treveling
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travelling
 in urban
envirement
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environment
environments
 better to safe time and safe from bad weather. Some
people
,
on the other hand
, believe that bicycles are more convenient for
city
traveling
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travelling
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. Many
people
 use bicycles for their daily routines and even for
traveling
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travelling
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 around the
city
, which is a great way to stay healthy. Cycling perfectly strengthens the heart muscle, stimulates the heart, improves blood supply to tissues, reduces the risk of cardiovascular diseases and stroke, and
also
 lowers. Using
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 not only
provide
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provides
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 good health but even
aid
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aids
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 for safe the air quality and
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environment
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the envirement
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envirement
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environment
 In conclusion, I believe that bicycles are
the
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a
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 great means of
the
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apply
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motion around the
city
.
Althouhg
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Although
,
people
 can utilize cars if they want.
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Pay attention to grammar and spelling. Small mistakes, such as 'choise' instead of 'choice' and 'treveling' instead of 'traveling,' can detract from the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both views and providing an opinion.
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There is an attempt to structure the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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