The pie charts illustrate the distribution of average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia for the year 2010.

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the proportions of the average household expenses in two various countries — Japan and Malaysia during 2010.

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, it is noticeable that both regions allocate the

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portion of their

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to different categories: Japan spends the most on other goods and services,

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highest

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is on housing.

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indicator has the lowest percentages of 3% and 6% in Malaysia and Japan, respectively.

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