The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for the changes to the school site in 2024

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The given pictures illustrate the campus of a school in 2004 and its planning development in 2024.

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, there will be significant changes to

this

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educational complex after 2 decades, in which, the building constructions will be noticeably expanded

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the green areas will be narrowed, and the sports ground will be moved to another place and downsized. Especially, there will be more changes to the right part compared with the left one and the number of students after expanding will be nearly double compared with before. Looking at the left half, from school building 2 to the left of the picture in 2004 and 2024, there will not be so many changes, just Building 1 and 2 will be connected into one block, and

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, the path between the two buildings will be removed.

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, a road will be constructed from the main entrance and go between building 2 and the green park to the right side.

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, the right section of the site in 2024 will witness more developments than the left.

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, the sports field will be moved to inside the big park nearby and be scaled down noticeably, to about 40% of the original size, and alternatively, the place that it used to be located will be replaced with a new educational construction named School Building 3 and another new parking lot called car park 2.

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, there will be a path connecting Building 1 and 2 with Building 3.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

245 words

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